同一首诗翻译活动（第二期）

Hermes

第一期终于落幕了，不过有兴趣的同学可以继续回帖。第二期我们要翻译的是这首：

Heraclitus

They told me, Heraclitus, they told me you were dead;
They brought me bitter news to hear and bitter tears to shed;
I wept, as I remembered, how often you and I
Had tired the sun with talking, and sent him down the sky.

And now that thou art lying, my dear old Carian guest,
A handful of grey ashes, long, long ago at rest,
Still are thy pleasant voices, thy nightingales, awake;
For Death, he taketh all away, but them he cannot take.

        -- William Johnson Cory






Cory的诗是对古希腊诗人Callimachus的翻译。下面是水建馥对Callimachus原诗的翻译和注释：

人说赫拉克利图斯故去，引动我
热泪流，想当年我两人
常在谈话间送夕阳下山。如今你
这哈利卡涅客人久已化成灰。
但你那些夜莺还活着，冥王
能捉走一切却捉不走它们。

注释1：赫拉克利图斯是一位小亚细亚西南哈利卡涅城的诗人。
注释2：“夜莺”可能是指赫拉克利图斯的诗篇，也可能是指他的美妙动听的谈话。

A. W. Mair's 的英译本供参考：
One told me, Heracleitus, of thy death and
  brought me to tears, and I remembered how often we two in talking put the
  sun to rest. Thou, methinks, Halicarnasian friend, art ashes long and long
  ago; but thy nightingales live still, whereon Hades, snatcher of all
  things, shall not lay his hand.

木头

1# Hermes

Heraclitus

They told me, Heraclitus, they told me you were dead;
They brought me bitter news to hear and bitter tears to shed;
I wept, as I remembered, how often you and I
Had tired the sun with talking, and sent him down the sky.

And now that thou art lying, my dear old Carian guest,
A handful of grey ashes, long, long ago at rest,
Still are thy pleasant voices, thy nightingales, awake;
For Death, he taketh all away, but them he cannot take.

        -- William Johnson Cory


他们说，赫拉克利特，他们告诉我，你已仙逝；
他们为我带来悲伤的消息，令我潸然泪下；
我哭泣，曾记得，你我多少次
在畅谈中忘却时光 挥送夕阳

而如今，你的作品依旧，我亲爱的阿里乌斯信徒的宾客
只一把灰烬，永久的，永久的歇息。
你可爱的声音依旧 你的夜莺仍醒着
死亡，带走了一切，却留下了它们。

Hermes

Carian 怎么变成“阿里乌斯信徒”
总的来说比上次进步了不少

Bernhardt

carian
arian

木头

啊，要不啥意思。

木头

我英文很差，你的节目我跟定了，雷死你，我高兴。

assking

有人告诉我，赫拉克利特，你已死去
    这令人恸哭的消息；
哭，如同我记住，我们畅然地谈论，
    多少次让太阳慵惓西沉。
   
如今，你的艺术早已化为灰烬，
    微乎其微，我亲爱的卡利亚的友人。
冥王，他可以夺走一切，
    但是你夜莺的啼声，婉转犹存。

Bernhardt

这个“慵惓西沉”甚妙

木头

抗议！
有翻译失误的地方没人指正，翻译得好点的也没人指出，那这个节目干嘛用啊？肯定没有人会参加的啦。

Hermes

指正：Carian 怎么变成“阿里乌斯信徒”
carian
arian
指出：这个“慵惓西沉”甚妙